Just You Wait: Powerpack Poem 6 - Flight of Lucidity + Poetry Friday

I'm still writing poetry inspired by Sylvia Vardell and Janet Wong's  newest book, You Just Wait - A Poetry Friday Power Book. Today I am sharing the poem I wrote that fit the Powerpack 6 prompt Spinning (concrete poem): Write a concrete or "shape" poem about something round or circular or spherical and try to arrange your words or lines in the shape of a circle or ring. Or try a different shape, if you prefer. 
I used a different shape:

Powerpack Poem 1 is here.
Powerpack Poem 2 is here.
Powerpack Poem 3 is here.
Powerpack Poem 4 is here.
Powerpack Poem 5 is here.

Keri is hosting this week's Poetry Friday gathering at Keri Recommends.

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30 comments:

  1. Keri Collins LewisJanuary 12, 2017 at 11:29 PM

    Oh, the twist had my heart in my throat! Well done, Bridget! (My 96 yo granny still remembers me usually, but has confused my mother with her own sister.)

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    1. Bridget MageeJanuary 13, 2017 at 6:37 PM

      Thank you, Keri! The fact that your granny is 96 is amazing - what a blessing. =)

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  2. Brenda at FriendlyFairyTalesJanuary 13, 2017 at 3:28 AM

    Awww, what a sweet memory to make fly in the sky. Great one, Bridget!

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    1. Bridget MageeJanuary 13, 2017 at 6:38 PM

      Thank you, Brenda! Poetry helps our spirits fly. =)

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  3. Jane @ www.raincitylibrarian.caJanuary 13, 2017 at 3:54 AM

    What a beautiful poem, and such wonderful imagery.

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  4. Carol VarsalonaJanuary 13, 2017 at 4:37 AM

    I love it, Bridget. It is whimsical and full of humor at the end in a loving way. The words fit so well in your shape. Innovative way of approaching this poem.

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    1. Bridget MageeJanuary 13, 2017 at 6:40 PM

      Thank you, Carol! I love playing with concrete poems. They don't always work - either the words or shape, but when they do, it is fun. =)

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  5. JoyJanuary 13, 2017 at 5:26 AM

    Oh, I know this poem and I love the way you have presented it.

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    1. Bridget MageeJanuary 13, 2017 at 6:41 PM

      Thanks, Joy! I thought you'd remember. Placing them on a photo can bring a new dimension to a poem. =)

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  6. KayJanuary 13, 2017 at 3:00 PM

    What a beautiful poem that combines words and shape and emotion. Have you read Atul Gawande's BEING MORTAL? I am reading it now (on how society in general and the medical system in particular) is not equipped to deal with aging and death). Your poem fits in with well with what he has to say.

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    1. Bridget MageeJanuary 13, 2017 at 6:42 PM

      Thanks, Kay! I have not read Gawande's book, but I will look for it. Sounds fascinating. Thanks for the recommendation. =)

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  7. Liz SteinglassJanuary 13, 2017 at 4:36 PM

    What a beautiful combination of sweet and heartbreaking.

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    1. Bridget MageeJanuary 13, 2017 at 6:43 PM

      Thank you, Liz! I think that is what watching your loved ones age is: a combination of sweet and heartbreaking. =)

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  8. Linda BJanuary 13, 2017 at 7:30 PM

    Poignant and sweet, Bridget. The visual is terrific, too. I need to start writing with that book, which I have. It seems to have some great prompts.

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    1. Bridget MageeJanuary 15, 2017 at 2:49 AM

      Thank you, Linda! Yes, I highly recommend this book for fun prompts. I'd love to see what you come up with. =)

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  9. Donna SmithJanuary 13, 2017 at 10:06 PM

    The poem is so precious. I love the shape and the background image for it!

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    1. Bridget MageeJanuary 15, 2017 at 2:50 AM

      Thank you, Donna! I appreciate your comments. =)

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  10. Violet N.January 13, 2017 at 11:54 PM

    Aw, Bridget, the shape is so precise! And the last line... well it got me like whiplash--nice whiplash though. Beautiful poem.

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    1. Bridget MageeJanuary 15, 2017 at 2:53 AM

      Thank you, Violet! Be careful with your neck - lol! Glad you liked the poem. =)

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  11. Alice NineJanuary 14, 2017 at 1:55 AM

    Ahhh, so good, Bridget! The shape poem on the photo drew me in. The subject was unexpected and one I know. Just as I was getting misty eyed, you gave my heart a twist that made me smile and then chuckle because when that happens in life that's all you can do.

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    1. Bridget MageeJanuary 15, 2017 at 2:55 AM

      Thank you, Alice! I'm glad you had a chuckle along with your misty eyes. =)

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  12. TabathaJanuary 14, 2017 at 1:11 PM

    You picked a great poem to experiment with -- very effective! I second "Being Mortal." I saw the PBS video and found it so, so moving: http://www.pbs.org/wgbh/frontline/film/being-mortal/

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    1. Bridget MageeJanuary 15, 2017 at 2:56 AM

      Thank you, Tabatha! Yes, "Being Mortal" is on my to watch list. Thanks for the link. =)

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  13. Mary LeeJanuary 14, 2017 at 1:23 PM

    So joyful...and so sad...all at the same time. Masterful that you used a kite, tethered so tenuously, to express these thoughts and feelings.

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    1. Bridget MageeJanuary 15, 2017 at 2:57 AM

      Thank you, Mary Lee! Your insights are always so profound. =)

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  14. Whispers from the RidgeJanuary 14, 2017 at 9:46 PM

    Oh, Bridget, this one snagged me for sure by the time I got to the end of it. Well done!

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    1. Bridget MageeJanuary 15, 2017 at 2:59 AM

      Thank you, Kiesha! A kite "snagged" in emotion... =)

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  15. jan godown anninoJanuary 15, 2017 at 8:51 PM

    Potent & heart melting, Bridget.
    And the shape is a real charmer.

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    1. Bridget MageeJanuary 16, 2017 at 6:48 PM

      Thank you, Jan! I think the subject of aging parents is relate-able to many of us. =)

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