Friday, February 6, 2015

Paper or Plastic?

each word thoughtfully
placed to avoid bruising
poetic bagger


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18 comments:

Tabatha said...

What an original concept! Love it. I'm wondering about putting punctuation at the end of the second line. Maybe a period or colon? But only if I am understanding the poem correctly, because it does change the meaning.

jama said...

Love this idea too! Tabatha has a good point, but maybe you intended the poem to be read both ways?

Andromeda Jazmon said...

I love it! What a sharp image and nice twist! I have often appreciated the advice to leave punctuation out of haiku so that the reader can find more than one meaning. I like them bald and stark that way.

Liz Steinglass said...

Nice! It is a funny question, isn't it.

Joy said...

Oh, I love the image this triplet brings to mind. Wonderful!

Bridget Magee said...

Thanks, Tabatha, for the suggestion. I actually like that there is two (or more) meanings - that is why I opted for the zero punctuation. I love that readers have a different take on meanings of poems. =)

Bridget Magee said...

Thanks, Jama! Yes, I think it can be interpreted in a number of ways...sometimes a readers meaning is more profound than my own. =)

Bridget Magee said...

Thank you, Andromeda! I, too, am not a fan of much punctuation in haiku. I love that my poem is stirring different images/meanings for different people. =)

Bridget Magee said...

Thanks, Liz! Yes, now they should ask did you bring your own bags. =)

Bridget Magee said...

Thank you, Joy! I can't look at a bagger in the grocery store the same way again - they, too, may be a poet. =)

Anonymous said...

I like your lack of punctuation. Aren't haiku supposed to not need them? I like thinking of conversationalists being poetic baggers, take care not to bruise with words.

Mary Lee said...

I love poems that use the title in such an intentional way!

Michelle Heidenrich Barnes said...

Seems your provoking a lot of thought with this one little haiku, Bridget. We're all poetic baggers at heart, aren't we?

Bridget Magee said...

Thank you! Bruising with words is too common these days on social media - hopefully people are more careful in their face-to-face conversations. =)

Bridget Magee said...

Thank you, Mary Lee! Titles are so hard, aren't they?

Bridget Magee said...

Thank you, Michelle! Yes, we are, and we are all fragile. =)

GatheringBooks said...

I love the layers that could be discerned in just three lines. Thank you for this thought-provoking post, Bridget.

Bridget Magee said...

Thank you, Myra! Sometimes I think smaller poems with fewer words provoke the most thought. I think they let the reader in a little more maybe. =)

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