I really like the line by line alliteration.
Wow, Liz, I didn't even notice the alliteration until you pointed it out. (I suppose I shouldn't admit that publicly). Thanks for your keen insights. = )
So short, but so much story in it! I'll bet your subconscious noticed the alliteration :-)
Thanks, Tabatha! Thank goodness for my subconscious! = )
I look forward to hearing your respectful responses...thank you for taking the time to comment! :)