Saturday, March 15, 2014

Sweetness Spoiled

her cupcake remains
untouched
positive biopsy

10 comments:

Linda B said...

It's like a six word story, Bridget, and powerful. I hope you are okay!

Bridget Magee said...

Thanks, Linda! I'm fine...just tapping into what such news would be like.

Liz Steinglass said...

I'm glad you're fine. You certainly used your imagination effectively. It's a very moving poem.

Bridget Magee said...

Thanks, Liz! This was my submission for tinywords...it was rejected hence showing up on my blog. I'm going to try again next time they have an open sub period.

Jeannine Atkins said...

This made me catch my breath. The power of a few words.

Carlie said...

Oof! This is great. Love the emotion and story conveyed in such a small space. I was totally surprised, perfect juxtaposition of small, peppy looking poem and scenario with a cupcake that both ended up being so full of human tragedy and sadness. Clever.

Bridget Magee said...

Thank you, Jeannine! I try to pack a punch in as few words as I can - not always successfully (by some editorial standards). I'm working on my craft...every day. = )

Bridget Magee said...

Thanks so much, Carlie! I appreciate it. I keep working on these tiny poems that have juxtapositions...they are my favorite to write and read. = )

Marian said...

ah, perfect use of so few words. well done

Bridget Magee said...

Thanks, Marian. I do like the tiny poems. = )

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