Saturday, March 15, 2014

Sweetness Spoiled

her cupcake remains
untouched
positive biopsy

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  1. It's like a six word story, Bridget, and powerful. I hope you are okay!

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    1. Thanks, Linda! I'm fine...just tapping into what such news would be like.

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  2. I'm glad you're fine. You certainly used your imagination effectively. It's a very moving poem.

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    1. Thanks, Liz! This was my submission for tinywords...it was rejected hence showing up on my blog. I'm going to try again next time they have an open sub period.

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  3. This made me catch my breath. The power of a few words.

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    1. Thank you, Jeannine! I try to pack a punch in as few words as I can - not always successfully (by some editorial standards). I'm working on my craft...every day. = )

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  4. Oof! This is great. Love the emotion and story conveyed in such a small space. I was totally surprised, perfect juxtaposition of small, peppy looking poem and scenario with a cupcake that both ended up being so full of human tragedy and sadness. Clever.

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    1. Thanks so much, Carlie! I appreciate it. I keep working on these tiny poems that have juxtapositions...they are my favorite to write and read. = )

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  5. ah, perfect use of so few words. well done

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    1. Thanks, Marian. I do like the tiny poems. = )

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