A piece of cloth, needle and thread,
I sew and stuff, I make a doll.
Two arms, two legs, and a head.
A piece of cloth, needle and thread,
A doll who lounges on my bed.
By myself I made it all -
A piece of cloth, needle and thread,
I sew and stuff, I make a doll.
20 comments:
Oooh, I love triolets! Your lovely poem is perfectly suited to this form, Bridget - well done and wonderful.
Sweet and lovely, with a nice lilting rhythm. I almost felt like skipping around in a Kate Greenaway picture . . . :)
Thank you, Robyn! My daughter inspired it yesterday by sewing herself a doll! (She's 9). The triolet was an experiment. =)
Thanks, Jama! I'd skip with you in a Kate Greenaway picture any day! =)
What a lovely triolet. It works so well. The revisions seem like stitches going in and out.
Thanks, Liz! I love the idea of stitches going in and out...=)
I have enjoyed playing with the triolet form. This one delights me with the alliteration of sew and stuff.
Thank you, Margaret! I don't feel super comfortable in this form, but it was fun to try. I guess the only way to get better is to practice, practice, practice... and that's what I do, everyday. =)
Great job with your triolet! I especially love the repetition of "A piece of cloth, needle and thread". It really does give the feel of stitching. Thanks for sharing it!
Hi, Bridget. I love your triolet, and you've taught me a new poetry form. I often stick to the same old form in my poetry, so I think it is great that you are experimenting. And very brave of you to post a poem a day. That is also great!
Thanks, Linda! Triolet is not easy, but I'm glad I gave it a go. And I am glad my daughter gave me the inspiration by sewing that doll. =)
Thanks, Kerry, for stopping by and reading my poetry. I figure with a poem a day I make sure I practice my craft, but with mixed results on the quality of poems some days I'm afraid. =)
As Linda said, your poem has captured the rhythm of sowing...and the line, "by myself I made it all"... something so poignant about that.
The triolet is one of my favorite forms--you get the power of the repetition but the variety created by mixing with other (but not too many other) lines. This works very well, Bridget! (And congratulations on having children who know how to sew.)
Triolets seem to work best for topics that go in and out, up and down, back and forth. Yours is perfect!
The wonderful synthesis of form and beautiful lines is astounding. Enjoyed this greatly! Reminded me of Neil Gaiman's Coraline! :)
Thanks, Tara! My daughter takes a lot of pride in sewing things herself - especially when I am inept at sewing. =)
Thank you, Heidi! It's a new form for me so it means a lot to me that you think it works well. My daughter gets all the credit for learning to sew on her own - she was very motivated to do it. Good thing, since I am not at all skilled in sewing. =)
Thank you, Mary Lee! Sewing lent it self nicely to this poem - glad my daughter decided to make a doll this week. =)
Thank you, Myra! I appreciate your kind words - my work and anything related to Neil Gaiman is high praise indeed! =)
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