Friday, March 8, 2013

Doll Making (triolet)

A piece of cloth, needle and thread,
I sew and stuff, I make a doll.
Two arms, two legs, and a head.
A piece of cloth, needle and thread,
A doll who lounges on my bed.
By myself I made it all -
A piece of cloth, needle and thread,
I sew and stuff, I make a doll.

20 comments:

Robyn Hood Black said...

Oooh, I love triolets! Your lovely poem is perfectly suited to this form, Bridget - well done and wonderful.

jama said...

Sweet and lovely, with a nice lilting rhythm. I almost felt like skipping around in a Kate Greenaway picture . . . :)

Bridget Magee said...

Thank you, Robyn! My daughter inspired it yesterday by sewing herself a doll! (She's 9). The triolet was an experiment. =)

Bridget Magee said...

Thanks, Jama! I'd skip with you in a Kate Greenaway picture any day! =)

Liz Steinglass said...

What a lovely triolet. It works so well. The revisions seem like stitches going in and out.

Bridget Magee said...

Thanks, Liz! I love the idea of stitches going in and out...=)

Margaret Simon said...

I have enjoyed playing with the triolet form. This one delights me with the alliteration of sew and stuff.

Bridget Magee said...

Thank you, Margaret! I don't feel super comfortable in this form, but it was fun to try. I guess the only way to get better is to practice, practice, practice... and that's what I do, everyday. =)

Linda said...

Great job with your triolet! I especially love the repetition of "A piece of cloth, needle and thread". It really does give the feel of stitching. Thanks for sharing it!

Kerry Aradhya said...

Hi, Bridget. I love your triolet, and you've taught me a new poetry form. I often stick to the same old form in my poetry, so I think it is great that you are experimenting. And very brave of you to post a poem a day. That is also great!

Bridget Magee said...

Thanks, Linda! Triolet is not easy, but I'm glad I gave it a go. And I am glad my daughter gave me the inspiration by sewing that doll. =)

Bridget Magee said...

Thanks, Kerry, for stopping by and reading my poetry. I figure with a poem a day I make sure I practice my craft, but with mixed results on the quality of poems some days I'm afraid. =)

Tara @ A Teaching Life said...

As Linda said, your poem has captured the rhythm of sowing...and the line, "by myself I made it all"... something so poignant about that.

Heidi Mordhorst said...

The triolet is one of my favorite forms--you get the power of the repetition but the variety created by mixing with other (but not too many other) lines. This works very well, Bridget! (And congratulations on having children who know how to sew.)

Mary Lee said...

Triolets seem to work best for topics that go in and out, up and down, back and forth. Yours is perfect!

GatheringBooks said...

The wonderful synthesis of form and beautiful lines is astounding. Enjoyed this greatly! Reminded me of Neil Gaiman's Coraline! :)

Bridget Magee said...

Thanks, Tara! My daughter takes a lot of pride in sewing things herself - especially when I am inept at sewing. =)

Bridget Magee said...

Thank you, Heidi! It's a new form for me so it means a lot to me that you think it works well. My daughter gets all the credit for learning to sew on her own - she was very motivated to do it. Good thing, since I am not at all skilled in sewing. =)

Bridget Magee said...

Thank you, Mary Lee! Sewing lent it self nicely to this poem - glad my daughter decided to make a doll this week. =)

Bridget Magee said...

Thank you, Myra! I appreciate your kind words - my work and anything related to Neil Gaiman is high praise indeed! =)

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